Wednesday 17 January 2018

Flash Fiction - The Ghost Train

A 100 word story based on the following picture prompt.

PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

The Ghost Train 

Jenny licked her lolly, looking on with interest as the fast, spinning rides with flashing lights enticed the punters. Screams of fear pierced the air. Babies, the lot of them, she scoffed.

Camille grabbed her hand, ‘Come on, let’s go on the ghost train.’

In complete darkness, the safety bar pressed uncomfortably against their bellies. The train set off, slowly at first. Eerie sounds spooked them, smoke blinded them, ghouls leapt out from every direction. Drip, drip onto their clothes, blood. They screamed and sobbed, this was too real. As they re-entered the daylight they laughed, hysterically. Melting ice lollies.

Hope you enjoyed this piece of flash fiction 
Bettina x

*Many thanks to Rochelle for this week's prompt. If you want to read more stories based on this picture - click here 

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  1. Glad it was just the ice lollies. I feared something worse.

  2. Dear Bettina,

    Such a fun story. I love the way kids can scare themselves.



  3. Haha, I like that they added to their own interactive experience!

  4. Brilliant! I wondered where your story was taking us and then those last three words. I featured a ghost train in mine too. Great minds....!

    Click to read my FriFic!

  5. Melting ice lollies was a nice touch!

  6. Well done You've set us up for a terrifying ending and then dripped ice lollies on us.😊

  7. Look what you've done. Now I feel like having an ice lolly :-)

  8. Sounds like fun! You can't beat a bleeding ice lolly.

  9. MOst of the fun is the fear :)

  10. That ghost train sounded pretty scary to me, I'm sure I would have screamed too!

  11. That was my sister! Nothing could scare her quite as much as she to herself!


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